These chapters are so nice to me... like little chocolates in a box. I keep on finding more layers in the box. Woot! I think you're sticking to a colour scheme here, even inadvertantly. There was the orange and red in the last chapter, and now the amber of the alcohol in this chapter. Deceptively warm. Like Hell. Update soon. I'll be watching.

-Stardust.

I love your short and overly descriptive chapters. Don't change. I love the imagery of the redheaded girl being thrown into relief by the light of the harsh orange street light. I would draw it if I were artistically inclined.

-Stardust.

That's really... pessimistic, for lack of a better word. I like it, but I'm a bit depressed now. That's good. You're very descriptive, and your style is very dark and poetic. Nice.

-Stardust.

wow. you sure have a lot of angst in your work. haha. but this was good, the portrayal of fairytales in a different light. very different. and all the emotion, whoa. nice one. update soon!

of, your style's pretty direct and powerful because of it. i like the over descriptions though! makes the plot an icing on the cake, but hey, that's me. write more, please :)

i love your short stories. wow. i am definitely adding you to my fav. author's list. haha.

Wow... just wow... I was thinking rape... but I don't think raped people have sex O-o; Well... very good non-the-less ^^ But I might I suggest someone read over your work for typos before you post it?

Interesting. I'm left wondering about the second part of the story, though I'm sure that's intentional. I like your narration style.