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sodalabels 2008-08-02 ch 43,	abuseI found this story absolutely charming. It has just the right touch of drama and romance. I was very surprised to find that it was written by a fifteen year old. It's very well written for this site and an enjoyable read. You have a nice vocabulary and good grammar. It's obvious you actually edit your writing. Thank you for also keeping with one point of view as interesting as it would be to hear Ingram's thoughts. The end felt a bit rushed, but you tied up all the loose ends. Perhaps a bit more about Mr. Mitchell. Did he purposefully send her down the stairs or was that more an unforeseen consequence of him hitting her? I think I'd have been much more happy with the ending had she not gone down the stairs, but it's still a nice ending. Again thank you!
musha 2008-05-31 ch 43,	abuseFantastic story. Very light read for an afternoon. I knew she would pick Ingy (though I have to say, I actually really like the name Ingram); I myself would have done the same. As a response to your authors note, I actually don't have a life outside school AND I apparently happen to like romance written by 15-year-olds. Thanks for keeping it clean, most don't do that any more. I was also impressed you were able to keep with the classic style of writing. Very lovely story. Thanks for posting. :)
dj-baker 2008-02-22 ch 42,	abusegreat story i realy think your descriptive words are amazing especialy the way you describe the eyes! keep it up
Gabby 2008-02-11 ch 43, anon.	abuseWow. Read this from beginning to end...it was amazing. You'd think this story would be the same as so many other regency-like stories, but this had so much more to it. Like the suitors: she could have picked any of them! Well, until it was narrowed down a bit, but either one of those two were very possible...possibilities. I loved it! It had me on the edge of my seat from beginning to end.
Erisah Mae 2007-10-20 ch 43,	abuseThis is a wonderful mixture of bitter and sweet, and the ending was quite adorable. As I may have indicated in my earlier reviews, i foind your characters marvellously fleshed out and realistic, and I was drawn quite quickly into the storyline, the range of individual struggles and intertwined relationships had me hooked ;). Brilliant. Erisah p.s.If you ever feel like reading some of my stuff, feel free, I would love to hear how you received it, however, you needn't feel obligated- this shouldn't be extortionate.
Erisah Mae 2007-10-20 ch 34,	abusePoor Christopher. There is something miserably selfish about people who stop living because some person close to them has died- wallowing in sorrow will beget nothing but more sorrow, and as Helena remarks, it is very doubtful that the dead would be happy about this. It says a fair bit about his affection Angie, but such depths of dependence are not healthy, no matter what the relationship. I can't say that I'm disappointed (or surprised) that she'll be marrying Ingy now- troubled past or not, he always seemed to have more depth, and I must say that I'm a sucker for the mystery guys. ;) Erisah
Erisah Mae 2007-10-20 ch 17,	abuseGood gracious, what a singularly repulsive man!
Erisah Mae 2007-10-20 ch 15,	abuseI'm so glad that you gave Henry a graceful out- there is nothing that saddens me more when the childhood friend becomes the backstop that isn't used... it seems so exploitative, and this "love for Ina" is a nice way out of that cliche. My only criticism so far is that I am unsure about the form of the nicknames you have chosen- I'm not sure that nineteenth century Brits used the "y" diminuitive... nonetheless, there is something hilarious about calling Lord Retton "Ingy" that is going to silence my complaints ;) Very nice. Erisah
Erisah Mae 2007-10-20 ch 3,	abuseI love your imagery! "pewter pools of promise" (okay, so it's a paraphrase, but still) Great! Any writer who must describe must toe the line between too little or too much description, and whilst you occasionally get dangerously close to the latter, you nonetheless restrain yourself enough that it doesn't sink into the dreaded region of purple prose. Very nice ;) Erisah
RoseLife 2007-08-04 ch 42,	abuseI...LOVE...YOUR...STORY!! It was by far one of the best stories I have read. It was thoroughly entertaining and I had an absolute BLAST reading it. I very much liked how you wrote the story. You use great descriptive language and your massive vocabulary is so amazing... I wish more people had wider vocabularies... including me! Lol. It takes stories to a whole new level and makes them so more interesting to read. O. I just noticed you have already started or mid-way through the sequel! O! And it’s about Henry! I should read it! Lol anyways... that was just me blabbing my thoughts out loud. Hehe. But two questions. You probably have already outlined the answers but I might have just missed them or something, so here they are. During what time period does this story take place? And: what ages are the main characters? I think maybe coming of age is... 21? So would that mean that Helena is 21 and Ingy is about 35-36? Not sure lol I have no idea! But altogether, I loved your story! Keep up the fabulous work. =P ~RL~
DaRk TiNk 2007-01-01 ch 41,	abusei have reviewed for the a/n already but i feel like i must review again for the blasted thing wont let me review twice for a chapter...so i shall review on this one... please oh please i beg of you to do more married scenes of ingy and helena i beg of you!
jekodama 2006-08-12 ch 43,	abuseA fantastic story! I read it complete in one session, and I'm most impressed by your writing skills. Absolutely wonderful story and characters! It somehow reminded me of the Bronte sisters and their books. There are some mistakes and typos, but they are easily overlooked. I admire you talent, and encourage you to keep writing! Good look!
hannagrace 2006-08-06 ch 43,	abuseHullo, Rei Rei! [d'ya guess who this is yet?] EXCELLENT story. I love your style, your flow, and your vocabulary. Your writing's definitely not at a highschool level - I'm sure I've told you something along those lines before. There were some typos and spelling errors, but those are very miniscule, and quite easy to overlook. You need an editor, perhaps, someone to read your stuff before you post it all online. I vote me. [I want to read your stuff before everybody else.] As for a sequel, I'd personally like to see more of Henry. He's cute, charming, and funny - what's not to love? Hope to see more of your stuff soon.-Hanna/Vy
princess jojo 2006-08-01 ch 43, anon.	abusei really liked your story. i would like to see more married scenes between Helena and Ingy, their so cute together! great job!!
written off as theatrical 1... 2006-07-31 ch 42,	abuseOk, so I did these reviews in reverse order. Oops. Yay! I love the ending-little Angie, happily married Helena & Ingy, another little one of the way-just lovely and sweet and fun. Congrats on completing your story!

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