Absolutely lovely! I'm a huge fan of little cliched one-shots!

That was so cute!

this story is really cute. i love it.. lol.

good job!!

i love it i love it i love it i love it i love it x 10 to the power of infinity!

oh this is really good. i totally love this! the last part is really cute. :)

aww.. cute:D

Very Good!

oh man that was good! good cliche, good fluff to lighten my little world! haha i wish it was longer! thanks for posting it up!

aw how cute. i love the last line.

fantastic job, and i really enjoyed reading this :D

~FO

loved it! xo

Holy fackk this was amazing! And so cute, I loved it.
Haha I'd probably be the one shooting the staple gun; it's completely acceptable in that situation, I would have been having a minor heart attack! But at least he held no hard feelings toward her. And the minor heart attack would be totally worth it if it turned out to be the guy I'd been harbouring feelings for for the last three years and it resulted in a major makeout session with him. Oh yes, I'd endure the heart attack for him any day :p

Anyways, amazing job!

xx domi

this is a very sweet story, vert cliche, but i've always love cliches!

the story needs more. you didnt say how and why Cole fell in love with her. and you didnt mention about her fears.
and i think thats all.




loved it.

I love how you wrote this...Just the right amount of emotion!

Cheers,
QueenAmi

I think this one-shot is really well-written! I'm so glad that I couldn't catch any grammar/spelling mistakes because I get really annoyed when I see those. Like really annoyed. But anyway, the only things that I couldn't understand were Reese's character/personality and how and when Cole fell in love with her. I'm sorry, but I get really anal about characterization. I actually think that's one of the most important parts in a story. I didn't understand Reese's character. She's smart, works hard, and is a goody two shoes, but she also cusses? Also, if she works hard, I would expect her to deal with the ** in the bathroom. Yes, most people (obviously) wouldn't, but the way you set her up portrayed her as the extremely hard working type, and I thought that would include the work place. And, I understand that Cole brings out the worst in her, but it still doesn't make sense how she could be all those things at the same time.

And Cole. Everything felt too rushed and it almost didn't make sense. When and how did he fall in love with her? The reader doesn't get any background on that.

And last but not least. When Cole tells her that she is scared, I really do believe that she is scared. But, what is she scared of?? That's the part I really want to know and I think that if the reader were to know this, we could perhaps understand her more. And I can't believe that Cole would just let that drop like that.

Wow. That was long. LOL. But I really do think this one-shot was good. The problems that I just brought up were probably because this was a one-shot and therefore, you weren't able to fully develop everything. So yes. If what I said didn't help at all, just ignore me. :P