|Reviews for Good Girls Don't Play with Fire|
| One Desire 9/1/06 . chapter 1
I adored this! It was really well written. Great job.
And thanks for reviewing my story. ]
| Slander By Osmosis 8/28/06 . chapter 1
That was... just AWESOME! At first - for some odd reason - I thought that this whole one-shot was going to take place in the Men's Bathroom, and I was thinking, "Hm...that's not particularly romantic, but I'd like to see where this goes - it's hilarious!" It turned out to be extremely well-written, funny, and very satisfying for the romantic that I am.
But, gawsh darnit, Cole sounds like a HOTTIE. I was pratically /drooling/ over his description. Heheh. In other words, the amount of detail and development you used for Cole and Reese (especially Cole, ha ha) were AMAZING! It takes talent to make a one-shot really great and not just mundane.
And when you mentioned Reese using a staple gun to fend off the "robber" I couldn't help but remembering having a dream where I shot pirates with a staple gun. Strange, and very weird, I know. _
One janitor for the school? That must've been a pretty small campus. At my school we have like five janitors (probably more) for each building, and we have quite a few buildings. Heheh. I loved the part about the superintendent getting "minor surgery;" brilliant.
Reese's outward hatred toward Cole sounds kind of like me (yeah. I get super awkward and protective about things like that. In my opinion, your friends don't need to know EVERYTHING. Especially embarrassing crushes). But I laughed out loud at the part where Reese pounded on the bathroom door when she suspected that Cole was listening in on her and Dan's conversation. Cute, and amusing at the same time.
The opening sentence was superb. A real eye-catcher. I just thought that this was an over-all great one-shot, and I hope you do more things like this! Keep on writing!
| Miz Em 8/27/06 . chapter 1
This was adorable. Just akward enough to make Reese a realistic cliche but still fluffy and fun. The bit about the stapple was freaky, poor kid. O.O Haha, nice job though. Cute
| Playing Games 8/27/06 . chapter 1
That. Was. Excellent.
No errors, and the mood never got off track. Both characters were painfully believable, and I'm glad that you left it as a one-shot. Wow.
Thanks for the review, and this story is going into my favorites.
| happilynuts 8/21/06 . chapter 1
...oh...my...goodness...that has GOT to be one of the best one-shots i've ever read! three words: so...incredibly...good!
| class.act 8/1/06 . chapter 1
I love this! Fluff at its best :)
| Jool 7/31/06 . chapter 1
AWESOME! 5 STARS! TWO THUMBS UP! Your characters are very likeable. I mean, you wish you knew more about them. Lately, I've been very disappointed at the "negative" and "dark" characters appearing in new stories on this site. I'm very reluctant to read new fics. I'm eternally grateful to your writing skill and glad I took the chance to read this wonderful story. If any mistakes exist in this work, it's not noticed by the flow of the story. BRAVO! Take any criticism with a grain of salt, then throw it over your shoulder.
My favorite scene has Reese hitting the door as Cole was on the other side listening. Great, Cute, & Funny!
The ending was sweet, yet passionate. Perfect. Hope you write more soon.
Only one problem with this story. I could have read more.
Thanks for sharing. Jool
| adio kalinihta 7/31/06 . chapter 1
hey guys, thanks for the reviews!i'll probably look at them all again tonight and edit the story as you guys shamefully, $2.13 is the wage. i'm a waitress (at a dingy pizza place, coicidentally) and they pay you $2.13. you have to make up the rest in tips. if you don't make enough tips, they'll cover the difference, but i've had to clean bathrooms once or twice at that wage.i'm really glad you guys liked it!
| Lily Llynn 7/31/06 . chapter 1
pretty good! ) despite that it's "cliche." xDD
| prolific bunny 7/31/06 . chapter 1
this was well written. even though there are a few errors here and there, it's nothing a little editting can't fix.
a wonderful one shot. I think i'll be looking out for any of your future stories. Be it short or novel length. again, great job.
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| Sylvia 7/30/06 . chapter 1
I like ur story. Please update soon...
| Heidi A K 7/30/06 . chapter 1
ah. amazing. i love it .seriously- icant wait to see if you make any additions. one word: fantastic.
| miss understanding 7/30/06 . chapter 1
I like the opening. I can't say I've ever read a story that began with someone scrubbing a toilet. Throwing up in a toilet, maybe, but not cleaning it.
She's only being paid $2.13 an hour? Is that possible? I thought minimum wage was something like $7.50. Maybe I'm wrong, but that number seems rather low.
Okay. You've said kneeling twice in two consecutive paragraphs. You might want to change that. My suggestion:
"Stifling a groan as her calves ached from being in one position for too long". Rephrasing without repetition. XD It's a lifesaver.
OMG! Cole really does seem like a total d*ck. I can't believe he was going to pee in the trashcan. I'm quite glad that she locked him out of the bathroom - though he seems like the kind who might tattle to get her in trouble and put at risk for being sacked.
Okay, let's see: Here, where you said "How could he possibly be Wheaten High golden boy"
It should probably say: "Wheaten High's golden boy" since he does, in a sense, "belong" to the school.
I knew it! He totally ratted on her! *smirk* She should have kicked his sorry bum out of the restaurant in the first place. Of course that probably would have gotten her fired and not just a reprimand.
What a nice janitor. I can't believe he just let her in to make copies. Our janitor's really nasty and mean. He makes crude jokes and yells at the freshmen. 'Course, that could be because some of the freshmen hijacked one of the construction cars and crashed it into a palm tree. -_-;
I can't believe she shot him with a staple gun. Does he exaggerate much? Okay, I understand he was in pain but he shouldn't have scared her.
I really like the ending. I also like how they acknowledged the cliche. _ It's nice to recognize things like that.
I liked your story. There were minimal mistakes, so I could go into the grammar. It was sweet and they stayed in character fairly well. Your vocabularly is quite good, too. I am impressed by how much effort was put into this story (unusual, for a one shot).
I hope to see more of your writing soon! Keep at it!