Almost forgot that I read this fic...certainly forgot to review (unless of course FP crapped out, but I dunno). Well, anyways, nice story so far and I certainly hope that you find your way to finish this tale someday since it seems to b shaping up rather nicely.

So, nice job an' all that, g'luck with it in the future.

-Avel

Hmm...interesting to see this sort of fic, very autobiographical in tone and style so far. I have to say that I like this style of presentation and this sounds like it's going to be an interesting story (though I suppose a bit predestined). Anyways, nice job so far, a couple words seem off and some of the order could be improved, but tis quite nice. Good job so far.

~av

That was pretty interesting. I like what you've posted so far - you might want to watch for word choice, though. There were a couple spots where it felt a little strange, or could have flowed better. I enjoyed the accents you used, it did a very good job of conveying an accent - that can be hard in text. I would have kept reading! =)

-Z

That was a nice read. I like your writing style - no, I quite admire it. You apply just the right touch of detail without sounding too wordy. That's something I have to work on myself. This particular story kept my interest to the latest update, and this sort of thing usually isn't my cup of tea. Good on ya!