ohh...i very much liked this

couldn't we all..

I like the sheer uninhibited glee that emanates from this. Like true exuberance, a rush of emotion tumbling across the page. Excellent work.

there's a rustle of faerie wings in this and lots of sparkle dust i think : )

very cute

I do love the image that the first lines create...well-put together. However, I have to agree that the ending wasn't as solid as I would have liked. But all in all, it was a lovely piece. :)

The first three lines are really nice "see the sunrise stretch and swallow the night" Beautiful. However I think the last two are uneccesary and detract from the rest a little.

I'm also not too sure if the ending does this poem justice, but i suppose it does reflect a true teenager, good job, anyway.

I love the idea behind this poem - you get the message across very clearly. I really like the almost whimsical note the poem ends on - very well done.

the only problem was some parts were hard to read due to the wording(it could just be my English - not my first language).

But in all, very well done.

I have mixed feelings about the ending of this. I don't know that it's strong enough to support the first part of the poem, which was fantastic.

The second line/stanza/whatever you want to call it was awesome. I'd just take out a few of the words at the end that are unnecessary, change it to "glitter sliding from my skirt onto the sidewalk." Not a huge change, but reads easier, and is a little clearer. Nice work. Keep writing! :)