Good poem.

~Twilight Starr~

the last two lines made it for me. they're just a little bit threatening which leaves the reader with a different twist on the situation than he/she has had the rest of the time... very very cool.-aly

Heartbroken is what it seems she is. Very descriptive scene. Especially the part of 'the water runs down, plastering her darkasnight hair to her whitaslight face'. I really like your description. Very nice.

Beautiful.

Quite simply the most beautiful thing I have read today.

It's fantastic.

~* Noelle

i like the imagery and formatting in this piece.

it works really well in the second stanza as emphasis.

and those last two lines? killer.

.:midnight:.