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| oxoxkiss 2008-01-10 ch 1,  | abusebeautiful. depressing in a way.. |
| no.peace.los.angeles 2007-11-03 ch 1, | abusePretty good for your first piece on here (assuming you didn't delete a bunch of stuff/have other accounts, as I most certainly did). I like all the bits about the stars - I love poetry with celestial references in it. Really nice. Keep writing! :) |
| Isis ShadowWolf 2006-12-12 ch 1, | abuseSo sad, that girls fall for guys like that. But I can relate. 'Tis a pity and a wonder that we give into our more carnal desires whenever they suit us the worst... As for your poem itself, it's a bit long, but absolutely lovely. I love how you used dual tones to convey the internal conflict. Beautiful! |
| Marajohuiki 2006-11-26 ch 1, | abuseWow. Just - wow. This is great description and your use of words is amazing. It's got a sad feel to it... Wonderful work. |
| animefangirl1231 2006-11-21 ch 1, | abusewow that was really good! it was well spoken to say the least and thanks for reveiwing my first poem |
| xpirateslifex 2006-11-04 ch 1, | abusewow...you are truely a great poet..your useage of words are nifty...so keep writing! p.s thanks for the review... |
| cold white submission 2006-10-31 ch 1, | abuseYet another poem that simply amazed me. Again, your sense of wording is exquisite. I can't even describe how that made me feel. Sensual but all the while depressing. love it! |
| unspecified 2006-10-23 ch 1, | abusei know exacly how you feel...actually i am going through the same thing right now. i really like him, and none of my friends understand why i like him so much...it just happens lol i mean..i like him as a really good friend nothing more yet... |
| Sk8tR-BunnY 2006-10-01 ch 1, | abuseAt first when I read the summary, I laughed, cuz we all know how typical guys are. But at the same time this poem shows exactly how a women of low tolerance for manly ways, just falls in love with a man anyway. A little different from your others, but in a good way. Oh, and I completly edited "The Sweet Sound of Nothing" and changed the ending a little, just in case you thought my editing skills were not so skillful. Me so sorry! I was just so excited to get it on Fictionpress that I didn't bother with the Document Manager thingy. It might make a little more sense then before, since I've found another, more mental way of getting the message through. (haha. 'mental'. What a word. How well it describes me!) |
| Bronzeage 2006-09-30 ch 1, | abuseYou create vivid images and use metaphors very well. I like this piece very much. |
| ArchDemonNotion 2006-09-14 ch 1, | abuseThat is a very descriptive poem. The emotion comes out of it in the words and the world that is described. lol. I like it. |
| TeaWithOnions 2006-08-31 ch 1, | abuse"Your nomad eyes that rarely stay" I love that line. I also love your word choice throughout. I like how its so formal and yet the emotion is very clear. A very well written piece. Thanks for the review. |
| Lady-Poeticro 2006-08-31 ch 1, | abuseamazing images and many left be breathless, keep writing |
| saccharine asphyxiation 2006-08-31 ch 1, | abuseI like the shift at the end and between the beginning with the depth of love to the superficiality of lust. It really shows patterns of human thought beautifully along with the bitterness and remorse of unrequited passion. :) |
| Moondog Dozier 2006-08-29 ch 1, | abuseI like how the subtle repetition flows so easily as you roll over lines and connect thoughts. This is truly well developed, as it delves into the emotional depths of the situation, and brings the reader along in the eloquently worded rush. Excellent work. |