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Chasmodai Blue 2008-05-30 ch 1,	abuseI read this a long time ago (and many times since then) but I never reviewed. This is very possibly my favorite one-shot on fictionpress, if not my favorite piece of writing. It was cute. It was angsty. It had a realist named Mr. Thrifty. And political agenda (which was? You should tell me, I'm apparently not able to figure it out. Or if not unable, just unmotivated.) Either way, you're my hero.
Catseye*Rose 2008-03-08 ch 1,	abuseThat was really good! Lots of drama and fluffiness...I wasn't sure if it was going to be a happy or sad ending, so that kept things interesting. I really liked the characters, too, plus their contrasting philosophies. It was a lot of fun to read!
color-of-her-eyes 2007-09-18 ch 1,	abuseso, so beautyful!
ks darkstorm 2007-07-01 ch 1,	abuseOmg that was so amazing, and cute and just wow. It was really sad at first, but I was glad to read that it ended happy. I love how you write your characters, to me they seem really real. Another awesome story. Much love.
Amindaya 2007-06-26 ch 1,	abuseIt was so sad, but then it had a happy ending. I love Renee. This was just amazing. :D
Shampoo Suicide 2007-06-10 ch 1,	abuseMy only nitpick is that psychiatrists are doctors of the MD and not PhD variety. But, um, yes. I did indeed enjoy this. I'm not so great with the eloquent lovely praise or even the constructive criticism, so you'll just have to trust that I think very highly of this story and your writing style.
Silver Rain Fell 2007-05-27 ch 1,	abuseThis story is just... I don't know how to describe it! It's really different and special. I adore it!!
chrnoskitty 2006-12-21 ch 1,	abuseThat was sad, I almost started crying at Renee's ostraciation (sp? or is that even the right word?) from the rest of the world. I know how that feels, putting on a smile and living a fantasy world for the benefit of those around you. My lame attempt at interpretation is that, the world tells you to hide the bad behind your own happiness, and not take any of it into full truthness... Yes. Lame. Sad, sad, sad story. Good, but sad.
Lorelel 2006-12-18 ch 1,	abuseThis left me feeling a bit unsatisfied, the ending was so typical, it felt empty. There was a lot of talk about happiness, like Thrifty's 'chemical happiness' and the happiness Renee got from his Mother Nature religion which was only a matter of perspective. Another theme I felt throughout the story, Renee and the alien motif. Renee wasn't only physically 'alien', but mentally too. His outlook was so optimistic, too optimistic. I guess that could be a good thing but from his situation, it just seemed pathetic. He enchanted himself with his own illusions to blind himself from human pain. To protect himself he isolated himself with 'happiness' which I guess is what the title refers to. Also, Renee could only join the human race, as you said, when he becomes a realist. But was Renee finally seeing the truth, or was he creating his own pain? Being a realist seemed pretty miserable, like how Mr.Thrift had to use opium to get his shot of happy. And that leads to another thing that irks me, Malin was the one who introduced this dark world to him, but he is also the one who will love Renee. I'm also not too sure if Malin can really change, just as Mr.Thrift said. Things like the past, they can't be ignored.
Alala 2006-12-03 ch 1,	abuseOh, I was worried for almost the whole story that it wasn't going to be a happy ending, but it was! You definitely gave me plenty of anxiety, though. I liked how Malin had the intelligence equal to a thirteen year-old, which isn't too far of seeing as he quite school in seventh grade. I was really surprised he was twenty... Mr.Trifty, Malin and Renee are well-crafted, but to me it felt as though Tom, Becky and Vera, though only minor characters, seemed a little out of place. Maybe just not enough description...but they felt a little fake. Sort of like...an uncolored picture in a coloring book? I suppose description is a little harder without being in 1st person, though. Anyways my thoughts...probably a little hard to understand...but nonetheless.
Kasee Lara 2006-12-02 ch 1,	abuseI loved Mascara, so just came to see if you'd written anything else. And then I found this! It's lovely. The characters are constructed well and I thought it was going to be sad. But you went all fluff on me! Normally I hate it when a story is destined to be sad and the author changes it, but I loved this ending. It was cute and made me smile...the whole way through! The alien concept...wow! Very original. I thought they were around thirteen, so you expressed Renee's naivety really well. I love all your work, can't wait to see more from your hand!
Silania 2006-11-26 ch 1,	abuseI absolutely loved this! I like your writing style and the story itself flows well. Very sweet and I uber-heart the fluffiness of the ending. Malin and Renee are so cute!
Sirivinda 2006-08-28 ch 1,	abuseMalin is one of the most common girls' names in Sweden. Out of curiousity I found out how many boys there are (in Sweden) bearing that name, turns out there are two. But then I guess your Malin doesn't actually live in Sweden. :) But anyway, like with Mascara (which I'm currently reading again) it's so well written it's complete bliss to read. I really wish I could express myself with the same ease. Looking forward to whatever you're going to publish next.
Espantalho 2006-08-11 ch 1,	abuseWOW! I have no words to describe how wonderful this story was to read. At first I was daunted by the length, but the characters really grabbed me and sucked me in with their uniqueness (especially Renee). I really felt the emotion throughout this story as well; I'd be lyin' if I said I hadn't wanted to cry when Renee got his innocence destroyed at the McDonald's. Actually, I wanted to cry most of the time, but when the ending came about I was definitely squealing (as childish and fangirly as that is). You really made me care about the characters, and different though they are, they seem to fit together. As usual, your grammar was perfect, your characters were flawless (well, except for the intended flaws), and your story was fantastic. It's going on my favorites. You rock. Keep it up. - Espantalho
kazoua 2006-08-04 ch 1,	abuseMy eyes are aching after reading this. This was such a good story. I really don't know how to explain it but this was really a wonderful story. In all senses practically. Writing style, characters, plot, everything.

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