ah! angry people. haha - i'm not one who likes reading stories about sex and that, but i didn't really know that'd be in here, but props for not overdoing it and making it last for nine pages like some people do. don't worry - my review shouldn't be mean.

there are just a few gramatical errors. i mean, they aren't breaking your story but that's really the only thing i found. if you continue this story - what are you planning on for a plot? i'm interested to know! woo-hoo!good job

-snicket