aw that is so sweet. your a great writer!

~SarahJane

I like this a lot. I really like the repetition, it definetly brings something to the poem. Great work. Vx

I dunno, I don't think it sounds unfinished, I like it the way it is but yeah... Anyways, I loved the repitition of this "Cross my heart/And hope to die./I promise you, I never lie…" To me, it sounds like...like maybe you used repitition as sort of irony in a way? Like, they're lying as they say it and they're repeating it to just convince themselves... wow I don't think that makes sense haha. Well that's just my out look on it and I'm so sorry if I totally screwed up...Any way, I enjoyed it, Keep it up!