this is a beautiful pice very well done. love the description and metaphors all worked so well to compile such a lovely piece or art. i really liked this, and i hardly ever say that! ;) write on! :)

I love the way you described the subject of this poem. All the images were vivid, but they left a feeling of mystery about the subject at the same time. You said everything that needed to be said, without giving anything away. My only suggestion is that you separate this into stanzas, rather than leaving it as one long stream of words. Keep up the good work!

This is very well written, well done.