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| Elizabeth Anne Hamilton 2007-07-05 ch 6,  | abuseI have very much enjoyed reading your story so far, please update soon! I want to know where you are going with this. |
| Sapp 2007-06-24 ch 6, | abuseomg i love your story, it's a new twist on an older story. keep going and update soon plz! |
| Muse of Maverick 2007-04-15 ch 6, | abuseoh this is so good! the kidnapper is kinda creepy, but i want to know more about him!! :-) Please update soon. |
| Noihseret 2006-09-07 ch 6, | abuseWoOT! Scarab! ^^ he's so cool... yeah, I wondered what was going on with the chapter numbers... lol I am really impressed by your progression. it feels like you really know the characters well and it shows in your writing. great job!! ^^ |
| Noihseret 2006-08-18 ch 4, | abuseWOW! this is amazing! I couldn't tear my eyes away from the screen for even a second! your writing skills blew me away!! I loved the part where Celeste taught the pharrow english. "Pillow." lol, that was great! I think that scene was the best portrayal of your talents in all the stories I've read of yours. :) write on!! ^^ |
| ebonymisery 2006-08-18 ch 4, | abusenice story!wanna see what happens to our wannabe next! |
| Murasaki 1/2 2006-08-13 ch 3, | abuseoh. ...the pharoah. I like this story and I'm sorry I overlooked it. |
| Noihseret 2006-08-13 ch 3, | abusewow. this is really cool! ^^ I like the bit with the snake. that was clever. the only suggestion I have is to go into detail a bit more. when you say "the pharrow" don't tell us it's the pharrow, describe him, tell us what he's like so that we know he's the pharrow. same with the room she woke up in. describe that a bit. don't just say it was for an Egyption princess. anyway... great story! I can't wait to find out how Celeste gets herself out of this one ^^ |
| Noihseret 2006-08-10 ch 2, | abuseyeah, I don't much like Celeste. but great story so far!! you should elaborte more. such as the very first sentance,"...as Trish Sohma broke his nose." describe how she broke her nose. don't just say it. by the way... do you happen to read/watch FruitsBasket?? it seems like you would from some of the names you give your characters. anyhoo... I can't wait to read more!! ^^ |
| Noihseret 2006-08-10 ch 1, | abuseI like how you put up stuff about the characters. very clever ^^ |
| Immoral Haki 2006-08-06 ch 2, | abuseWow... the story's sounding great so far. Keep it up. ^^d |