Vivid. A dangerous and tragical poem.

"-&- her life f i z z l e d out"

I love your diction. Just lovely.

Wow. I don't know what to say. Um...it speaks. That's all I can muster up to say.

LOVE the rhyming. I love the whole thing really. The ending is terrific. I love it. And all of the imagery and comparisons, "The girl with weed on her breath,/kissed the boy with poison on his lips." I love it. Wow. It gave me the chills. I'm like speechless. Love becomes an obsession, a hobby after a while... Very deep. I was actually just talking to a friend of mine about that. Yeah. Bravo. I love it to pieces.

Wow, another great poem. ^_^ I love the way you ended it (although it was kinda sad). Awesome work!! ~Sara

Awesome ending and I loved the bit about the poison on his lips.