Reviews for it's a little bit disappointing

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elasticbobaturtle 2007-01-06 ch 1,	abusedang that review throttle. but anyways, your style is always so interesting and almost chilling, I love your unique voice and rhythm, the way you punctuate. lovely language that spill free.
none of burt's beeswax 2006-12-05 ch 1,	abuse"it didnt rain and we weren't who were are now/(although, yes, no)." that line is brillant. i think this could be a bestseller even in the this tense.
Pink Sparrow 2006-11-11 ch 1,	abusewow, lovely, it really makes you think about things. I love the lines 'too bad i'm tasteless like lukewarm water' and also 'I then realized that in the present tense this could have been a bestseller' nice work. wonderfully written.
lackluster 2006-08-30 ch 1,	abusetuesday. yes, of course. "(although, yes, no)"- i love that. i don't know why. "I then realized that in the present tense this could have beena bestseller"- this one too . i just love it.
naomi homie 2006-08-25 ch 1, anon.	abuseyup, that cross on the 91. its creepy with the line of street lights on la palma, it leads up to the cross right in the center. thanks for your review sara marinara, naomi
a lonely september 2006-08-24 ch 1,	abusethis is one of the peices that make you love poetry... because it says so much and in the end it's just you who truly knows. it just has so much to it. written wonderfully. i like it. your writing has gotten better since the last time i read it... it was good to begin with, and it's even better now. : ) keep writing.
poet tree 2006-08-22 ch 1,	abuseaphrodite, the cliche creature of beauty. is she really? hah. yes. that's what i thought when i wrote it. i miss writing it.
classic violet 2006-08-22 ch 1,	abusevivid and real... i love it!
naomi 2006-08-21 ch 1, anon.	abuseyea i meant time i was hoping everybody would understand.. i never make errors in my documents haha
diffident 2006-08-20 ch 1,	abuseGoot, as always. I don't really get the "(although, yes, no)" part though. I do wonder who this was written about. "Though as they, the crowd, the ominous clouds / that are broken up against the baracade of dirty windows, / tried to judge me, judge you / I then realized that in the present tense this could have been / a best seller" Beautiful marie
FunkyFlower17 2006-08-20 ch 1,	abuseinteresting. i liked the way u begun, almost gives this a story-like perspective. keep up the awesome work and thx so much for all your encouraging reviews :) ~mez~
do not resuscitate 2006-08-12 ch 1,	abuseinteresting. "i then realized that in the present tense this could have been/ a bestseller." that part is awesome. and i love the last two lines. they stick in my mind.
the.pink.life 2006-08-09 ch 1,	abuseDo I sense a hint of bitterness in this? It's interesting. I'm not sure I understand the humor in it, though. Keep writing! :)
breezy nostrils 2006-08-09 ch 1,	abusetoo bad i'm tasteless like lukewarm water - wow that line is great. nice work.
EnigmaticArsenic 2006-08-07 ch 1, anon.	abuseimagine watching your future with a touch of disappointment- oh yeah, i can definitely relate. ha ha. (and i don't really remember that well either, but one thing i did notice- because i'm a spelling freak like that- you put two 'c's on across.)nice poem, though. i love your way of wording things.

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