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Everything to you 2008-01-02 ch 1,	abuseI felt this one was choppy. It was good but could use a little work. I felt like it didn't flow. Like it was missing something, which I think it is missing something. ~Everything to You
cls81690 2007-12-20 ch 1,	abuseWow, this is beautiful. I'm not good at reviewing poetry, but I'll do what I can! Typically we say "from heaven" but "from the heavens". Also, I think you mean "the way my broken heart..." You use a lot of ellipses, I notice. I won't say you use too many, but you might want to think about it. The last one needs a period at the end, since it's the end. I really like this. It's so pretty, but there's something more than that...sorry, I'm having trouble finding the words for what I mean. I especially like the last two lines. Storms...I love storms. They're good for so many things.
ryansheart 2007-08-19 ch 1,	abuseAww, this is so sad. I love how you beautifully depicted the pain of the narrator. My favourite line would probably be [..to hide these tears I hope you'll never see ..]. It really ends it all well with emotions still dragging behind. Isabella.x (reviewers_found) Ps. I am so sorry if I don’t make sense, I usually don’t read poetry.
itse 2007-05-14 ch 1,	abusesad sighs u write a lot of sad. its great, especially the line about the rain hiding tears. liked it.
cerberouszerog 2007-05-08 ch 1,	abuseYO! YO! YO! NICE STORY! SEE! ME REVIEWING! W00T! I'm also hyper! I'll be normal in! Now... anyways is the story finished or not? The way I see it, it seems finished, if not then I can't wait for the next poem! I don't know how people are poets... I SUCK! Guess different people are good at different genres... anyways, sayonara spirit of the trees!(I think I just got a nickname for you off of your profile XD) Cerberouszerog He knows that he spelled Cerberus wrong... if you didn't notice, just read it a few lines up in the review.
DancingChaChaFruit 2007-04-13 ch 1,	abuseHere as promised! But I didn't randomly select a poem. For some reason, I've always loved poems that were about the rain (or at least used the rain as a metaphor or something), so naturally, I decided to read this one. Anyway, I liked this. You really captured the sadness well. Although I think you're missing a "my" before "broken heart" in the fourth line. Like I said, I like this. At the risk of sounding cheesy, the pattern was enchanting with the way the words fit together, and I like the rhyme scheme. Good job! =)
JezabelRomih 2007-01-29 ch 1,	abuseHe estado intentando comentar tus poesías, pero la ventana no se abría. Hoy por fin lo he conseguido. Me gusta mucho esta. Transmite tristeza, resentimiento hacia una persona a la que has amado mucho. Me encantaría saber escribir poesía, pero no tengo ese talento. Aprovéchalo :)
ShadowFane 2006-10-24 ch 1,	abuseI liked this a lot. I like insanity. Great job! ShadowFane P.S. No, I've never shown that poem to my mother. I'm almost afraid to let her see it...
Ladiebug 2006-10-18 ch 1,	abuseNice job. You're really good at capturing a feeling with just a few words.( this is one of the things i wish i could do, argh,)Keep writing!
Nadia 2006-08-16 ch 1, anon.	abusehey it's nadia from the my space u visited mine-nadz-mei love the poem, its my kinda thing. the kind you read and u can feel the pain in words, understand them. i hope your not in love.. its such a painful thing... keep writting you have talent
Playing Games 2006-08-11 ch 1,	abuseAbout my prose: Actually, she's already dead. And other than that, it doesn't make much sense to me either. It just popped out, we're on the same boat. I'm trying to figure out the horse part right now.
writerwithoutacause 2006-08-07 ch 1,	abuseyay a poem i can review! cause sadly i don't know spanish. and i really hope your last two poems were in spanish or this is embarassing. lol. another beautiful poem. the only thing i could actually point out, is i think ( i think) your missing a "my" in front of broken heart. but its sounds great none the less

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