good. the out/out rhyme is kind of redundant...but that might have been on purpose so no harm done. last line is great. really rings and means something.

This is very well worded and has a nice rhythm(hope I spelled that right). Sorry I haven't reviewed in a while. Keep writing!

nice . . .

That was really pretty good. The rhyming really made it flow and I really loved the last two lines. The middle doesn't quite flow as well as the beginning and the end but still nice work.

*wow* I really liked this. It was very well written, and a lot of meaning behind it, which really adds more to this..gives the words meaning..makes them more than just some letters combined together. This was great though. I've seen your name before...in the just-in section..so I'm guessing you have a lot of stories :D But I don't know if i've ever reviewed you before...and this was really great..so I'm glad I did.

"We love to live and live to die"

I like that saying. Great way to end this poem too! *keep writing!* And keep posting!

~britney~