Personal and believable. Flows nicely, but only because I read it with the appropriate punctuation you intended - perhaps it would be easier to read with the periods or commas since it isn't the type of poem that you want read as an "ee cummings type".

this is a very strong blinding poem. its wonderful. great. satisfing in a way.~Liz

Wow. This poem is excellent- it flows well, the phrasing is great, and I really understand and relate to what you're saying... awesome job.

So, I was sitting there reading this poem, and just going, 'wow, this is just such an excellent poem... this is just such a /GREAT/ poem. trista rocks.' It's... excellent, simply and fully. It reads and flows beautifully, and the ideas expressed are... I love this poem. The ideas... I don't know. Fantabulous? Great. Something. GREAT. I LOVE.

Also, thankee much for your review... I must upload mroe stuff. I will. I shall. Thanks...

~Aquila