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| dustytiger 2006-08-08 ch 1,  | abusethis is really well written, when people ask for constrctive critism i try to give it, the only thing i can think of is that more even lines could flow better, but it works well uneven for this peice so it's a tough call as to the theme, well you're right it can apply to many things (sing of a good peice in my opinon) it is something that each reader can relate to their own experiences in this concrete jungle of a world, great work, really, keep it up, thank you for sharing |
| Shadowed Echo 2006-08-08 ch 1, | abuseAwesome! This is great! Of course it helps that I know what the Elysian Fields are. I imagine some people wouldn't. |