This is what I need to be writing, right...?

It's great... it's inspiring, it doesn't feel fake. It's not all faux sunshine and bunnies and supposed happiness, it's a beautiful real poem. I like it. It's optimistic... the first line really reminds me of me; fearful... perhaps that was the feeling, perhaps not... but yes. It's great.

~Aquila

I like the tone of this aided by the archaic use of language although "daren't" strikes me as a bit awkward - you definitely don't want people focusing on a word too long as awkward or forced so perhaps revise - but the rest is nice. Short and sweet.

A really heartfelt poem, It's really good and don't change thing. Hope to see more like this in the future, keep on typing :)