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Reviews For: The Bloody Flute

Kier Haliana
2006-12-24
ch 1,
abuseFairly good so far. You missed a few commas here and there, but still good. I'm interested in reading more. I'll be waiting for your next post.
sarah
2006-09-08
ch 1, anon.
abusehey lauren! it's sarah from writer's craft...which was forever ago. yay i'm glad you're still writing your stories but where's nyx! i want to read his story! i enjoyed this chapter by the way...dialogue is your strength and it's a skill that i need to work on if my screenplays are ever going to see the light of day. i thought of you the other day when i met my room mate and i remembered that joke website about how to freak out and annoy your room mate. i may try one or two of those. bye!
heryseshta
2006-08-12
ch 1,
abuseHey, just decided to check out this story. It seems to have an origional plot, it's not often that people write about bards. However it lacks detail, the more you write about what the characters say the less you can put into detail. What does the land look like? What do the people look like? Good luck on your story!
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