   Ygg 2006-08-17 . chapter 2Simple and relaxing imagery.. good description! |
| Ygg 2006-08-17 . chapter 1 Wow excellent last line! The visuals speak directly to the imagination of the reader. |
 Nobody-n-Particular 2006-08-17 . chapter 1Cute. |
 the-foresight 2006-08-13 . chapter 1Very nice, especially the sage beauty line. |
 Moondog Dozier 2006-08-10 . chapter 1Excellent use of color and imagery. Good haiku. |
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