This poem is cutting. It's very direct, but I can say that it has an effective, touching tone.

I think for the second stanza you mean lives? The repetition, which I usually find unbearable, was well done.

keep writing

I like the reptition in this poem. Many writers overdo it and the reader is simply exhausted and bored by the end of the piece. This, however, was great. It flowed, and the conection between the start and end was great-not exact, but close.

Nice repitition.