This is one of those poems that is so good it makes me wish I could write like that.

I've (very) recently fallen in love with haikus, and this one is incredibly beautiful. God, it's so evocative. Wow. Favourites for sure.

Welp like everyone else said, your words surely paint pictures, that I never thought could be described in words. Oh, how I wish I had such a way of describing something... ^.^~Arf~

its simple, but the images were absolutely beautiful. Love it.

hisimple but effective i like it,keep writingjean

Beautiful, the images it created were stunning. I love it, I really do!

This made me think of 19 and believe me, that's a good sign!By the way, my Sleeping In The Rain was not of an AIDs sufferer, it was more of a mental problem than physical.

that was so gorgeous, i can't think of a coherent review...

Wow! So short, but powerful. Dazzling imagery with a tough of sinister. Wonderful. I love it, I really do. Keep up the great work.

dripping, fabulous

has an odd touch to it

I envy your gift of taking so few words and creating such a powerful poem. I particularly like the word 'oblivion'. Don't ask why. -e.l.

Well done.

Brevity and the time of transitions melt together wonderfully here.

marie

i'm at a loss. my throat feels funny.

pretty and mystical... evocative.