ain't that the truth? Good write

The painful truth of existence so well played out. This was done very well. You had a poets creativity and a teens apathetic tone. Very good. I bet you would be somewhat thought-provoking to talk to.

Em,

I'm not kidding...why do you think I am such a bad person? Why do you think I'm not good enough for Amanda? What did I do to make you hate me, think I'm lower than dirt and Think I don't deserve Amanda? I really want to know because I can't seem to figurer it out.

You think I don't loose sleep over Amanda? I've gone days without sleep because I can't stop thinking (worrying) about her...out with you, doing hell know what. Bad things happen when she's drunk and you know that. It's ok to get buzzed. But when she's drunk she gets crazy and dose things she regrets.

There IS bond, you can't say there isn't. you don't know me and have never even seen us talk. Yes I've only gone out with Amanda once and we don't intend to break up like you and her did.

Yes, I know she's been crash dieting (we talk...she’s my girlfriend, remember?) And I always tell her to stop because she’s perfect no matter how much she ways and that she's NOT FAT.

You said," . .anything?" Why, yes...yes she has. she tells me a lot. More than you think she tells me. WAY more. OH... And the last time she looked in my eyes (with her deep soothing blue eyes) and told me she loved me was seven days ago...which was the last time I saw her. She was spending the night at my place (I spent the whole time she was there wishing she would never leave my side)...still had a good time.

And you said "How do you think I sleep at night, knowing she's with someone like you" someone like me? What am I like?

OH and good luck stealing her...It will never work. Shes mine.

Wow-

This was.. amazing.

Your work, is amazing.

For now I am adding this to my favorite stories as well as you to my favorite authors. Really need to go to sleep so I'll leave more reviews on your other (awesome) things in the morning.

wow, kinda more like the Devil's masquerade ball. but i get your point.A fantastic job on the rhyming. very nicely done.

'filled with innocence-trusting and kind-we’ll beat that from you, given some time'This I like. Descriptive, mysterious, and yet, so true. o.O

Wonderful sound and flow. This one really takes off with the speed and the rush over the end rhyme. Very well developed, with a subtle underlying truth. Good work.

This is very haunting and nice...

I really enjoyed it.

Beautiful. Just beautiful.

i. am. gobsmacked! i am inlove with this piece - the subject, the mystery, the amazing way its written ... man your an incredible writer :] adds to faves