wow... this is a lot different than, um, other stuff i've read... but i still like it...

very interesting... i like it.

Wow the insanity of Mary comes through slowly till the end. She drags you into her reality slowly so you can't turn back. Very creepy.

Very, very interesting concept.

I'm reading this you hear?

Dood... that's just so... wow. And a man f* another man? Wow. Didn't know you were getting into that territory.

Creepy, if I may say so. (You'd probably think of it as a compliment anyway.) Nicely done, interesting concept, but! It's still way too vague. Perhaps it's meant that way, but the questions... sometimes hinder the enjoying process. For example, where ARE they? Why are they being kept there, apart from the obvious "Hey I killed someone!" reason.

Still, I liked this.

Creepy... I love the idea of the story being told through note-passing. Great job!

I like how you're writing this in the form of notes between two people. Not what you'd expect with a title like "The Girl Next Door" but I'm glad. The way Mary talks (or uh...writes) sends shivers down my spine. It's creepy. Hope you update soon.