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| Alyra Myst 2007-05-05 ch 11,  | abuseSo far it's a great story, but I'm still noticing a lot of mistakes that would be easily fixed by having one or two people read through before you post it. It would make it better if some of the simpler mistakes were fixed. I really like the idea and the way it's told, but some of the sentences don't really flow together well or they just seem more forced than they should, like descriptions for clothing. Good descriptions, but if each sentence starts with "He wore" or "She wore" about the one persons clothing it seems very repetitive. Sorry for the long review, and I don't mean to come off rudely at all if I am, but this is a good story and if a few minor mistakes were fixed it would be even better. |
| xoxo1 2007-05-05 ch 11, | abuseyay!! new part! wonder why charlie is seeing all this.. |
| xoxo1 2007-04-29 ch 10, | abuselove ur story!! update soon plzz |
| WrittingIsMyDrugOfChoice 2007-04-24 ch 8, | abuseLooks Jessica and Amelia are starting to heat up lol. I love the story so far hun. Hope you update some more. |
| shadowpreistess 2007-04-23 ch 7, | abuseCool you have a sequel. I was lazy so I never rated until now XD. But you've got a talent well to me you do. I cant wait for your next one to come out. |
| fallen angel818 2007-04-18 ch 7, | abuseHoly shiiznoodles that is creepy! Charlie got the worst of it I feel bad for him. O.O Update as soon as possible! |
| fallen angel818 2007-04-18 ch 6, | abuse-gasp- What are they seeing? Are they signs? Well, I'm just glad that you are writing again! ^o^ Update asap |
| fallen angel818 2006-11-09 ch 5, | abuseLOL!! IM SO GLAD U FINALLY UPDATED!! :D! I WAS ROTFL WHEN LUCY ORDERED THEIR FOOD!! HAHAHA!! KEEP GOING I HAVE BEEN WAITING FOR ANOTHER CHAPTER FOREVER!! AND THIS BRINGS ME MUCH HAPPINES!! :D Poor Sally/nerd lol kidding. |
| WrittingIsMyDrugOfChoice 2006-11-08 ch 5, | abuseIt's a good chapter. I'm glad I'm not the only who likes to use alot of detail lol. I can't to keep reading. |
| fallen angel818 2006-10-01 ch 1, | abuseHURRY UP WITH THE NEW CHAPTER!! I NEED IT! |
| fallen angel818 2006-09-29 ch 4, | abusehurry up and get the next chapter in haha i love this story!keep writing! |
| WrittingIsMyDrugOfChoice 2006-09-26 ch 4, | abuseWow! Sounds like Miss Amelia and Miss jessica have a dirty little secret. Oh and it would only be copy right if you took the whole song and said you wrote it. |
| WrittingIsMyDrugOfChoice 2006-09-12 ch 2, | abuseSame old gang. Glad to Lucy is still her slightlt glumpsy self hope you continue this story hun. |
| hunterbeta002 2006-08-30 ch 1, | abuseFalling off couches, that's Lucy for ya. Great chapter. You should update more often. |
| SwordOfLightBladeOfDarkness 2006-08-21 ch 1, | abusei really enjoyde high school hell. please keep updating the seqel. i hate it when people stop in the middle of a story and never finish it. |