Oh, It's SO SAD! i feel so sorry for the mermaid. You wrote so beautifully and it was so engaging that i just had to finish it. Too bad the prince and the mermaid couldn't be together. anyway, like i said...wonderful, and beatiful writing. i also love the fact that you added the other condition that to return as a mermaid she would have to kill the prince. Oh, so suspencful, even in that little bit. Absolutly beautiful. (i think i've said that enough...lol) It's true though. (:

The language and imagery are beautiful! Not quite the Disney version at all! Very well done, and captivating to read :)

I never liked the little mermaid... then, all I ever saw was the disney version and the other reviews say this is closer to the non disney story. But this was so sad and depressing... ( You're pretty good at writing tragic twists.

D Maranwe Telrunya

Again, a rather bizarre tale. I don't know what I really think about it, but this may have something to do with the lack of sleep I've been experiencing lately!

A well written piece though, and nothing in particular stands out as being wrong with it.

Spawny

Oh, such a sad story, but the original H.C. Anderson version is far better! Little Mermaid rocks!...There I said it. Great job, keep up the great work! ( :: )

OH! I love the original version of this so much, and I really love you're twist to it. xD I read your homepage...you can't possibly be as insane as me when I'm at my worst.

-Winter Flurry

Way to let the reader look into her mind, very well written. I don't really understand how this is a twist, since it seems to follow the traditional (non-Disney) story, but it's pretty good, anyway.

Depressing but good. FAVES!

Aw, poor little mermaid! I liked this one too. Nicely done!

Wow, you write really well! And this is sad. :-( lol Glad the Disney version didn't end like this!Thanks for your review, by the way, and yeah, I'm real impressed with your writing. Very good at describing things!

I love this! Nicely done capturing the emotions of the original "Little Mermaid" as the story was meant to be told.

That is a good twist off the original little mermaid but very sad. Great job.

Good job on this one, the theme of this story fits with the theme of the fairy tale perfectly.