i love it. simply amazing.
-samantha

I really like this. It flowed well, and it was very melodic. Nice. Very, very nice!

"I ain’t your mother,go back home for one of those.I ain’t your lover,I’ve got on too many clothes."-Nice bit!

"Sing me a song about Josephine,tell me all about the worldwith the tangerines,"-this whole stanza was great.

This one I liked. A lot. It was appropriately scathing, I thought, appropriately bitter. Made a point. This has that aloof, eloquent tone that so many competent poems do, which I think is a sign that you know what you're talking about.

wow.

just. wow. i. lurve. this. so. much. and i aint even sure why ... the writting is beautiful and so heartfelt and -

sing me a song about josephine

lurve that line! keep this up!

This is gorgeously written. Very melodic. I can imagine the music that should go with all, life is song, right?Cheers,B