Oh yeah, I forgot: EXCELLENT title.

Very interesting. I would quibble about the beginning, but I don't feel like I have a right, since you're obviously a very good writer. If I felt like I had the right, I'd say that I would have wished for more of an introduction. Without a firm vision of the normal, the supernormal seems a bit mundane. But probably that's just me. Anyways it's good writing and I look forward to reading more.

Well, I like the military theme. It's clever. You seem like a very clever writer.

The beginning paragraphs were a little abrupt. You know, the very beginning-if you were going to try to improve this I'd suggest not going in to such an immediate description of the setting, and not in such a blunt way as "There was...this was..on the other side of the room..." It's not a catchy beginning, and descriptions tend to sound generic if the author's style hasn't already set a little of the scene.

You have a really great style, though. This has the potential to be hilarious.