Good beginning. Zachary is a great villain - realistic and detestable - and Ildri seems interesting. I do like how she resents her beauty. I didn't really see any sense of the supernatural in this chapter as your summary suggests...it seems very business-like, romantic comedy ish so far.

I think the very beginning, with Ildri's POV, is a little boring because it is only background. It would maybe be more effective to give us this information in smaller doses? Just to keep the readers hooked.

She seems sort of submissive...good showing of that personality trait. I can't really relate to her yet, but I have a pretty good idea of her character from this chapter, and that's a good thing. Good job :)

hey!

This is really good! I like this whole thing with Ildri resenting her beauty it's something that doesn't often come up in fairy tales.

I can't wait to read more.

PLease update soon!!

~florida

Wow! I'm pleasantly surprised. I look forward to the "winged" part. Awesome concept, and I'll definitely be coming back for more.

_R&R my novel EARTHSTONES, please!

I love how you've fleshed out the characters; Ildri's life is so depressing. I'd like to see where this story goes - great work.