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| AkaiOkami 2007-02-21 ch 1,  | abuseAHAHA! i LOVE that last line! please update soon i'll be waiting :] |
| BrdomIsTheDvl 2007-01-19 ch 1, | abuseYour evil for not continuing this story! And very very mean! PLEASE CONTINUE! |
| DnAPnK-Kuro Kaze 2006-12-24 ch 1, | abusethis sounds like a really good start. to tell you the truth, i am worst at doing writing than thinking of what to write. so you'll never get any criticism from me. hope you udpdate soon! |
| xXHaunted CookieXx 2006-12-23 ch 1, | abuse=O please write more. this story sounds like its going to be really good. =D good luck ~~xHCx~~ |
| Ruri Star Sykel 2006-09-26 ch 1, | abuseWow this could be something good! up date alright? |
| Shihu 2006-08-24 ch 1, | abuse~AHH ! I LOVE THIS ONE >_< ~;__;~ You must finish it... =D I like both of the characters =3 -Shihu |
| Noihseret 2006-08-18 ch 1, | abuseo... Sieko sounds hot now, lol. looks like Sanyu's interested. ^^ cool start! this looks like a promising story. can't wait for more ^^ |
| Derek57 2006-08-18 ch 1, | abuseOkay, well firstly, I would like to thank your for your reviews on my story; any comments are always appreciated. Secondly, I want to congratulate you on a so far promising start to this story; I will be keeping up with this! They both sound like very interesting charcters and I feel that this story has real potential. Good work. However, thirdly, I must point out that there were a few minor errors; simply the fact that at a few points throughout, the tense switched from past to present (and vice versa). Another thing I felt could be improved upon is the fact that it all happened a little fast and why does Sanyu beat up Seiko anyway? I'm a little confused! Other than that, I enjoyed reading this. Derek |
| Kamiko-Miha 2006-08-13 ch 1, | abuseYes, yes you have Sanyu. It has a great start. Thanks for posting. |