Fabulous and very realistic :))

Take care mate!

I like this... well written and very true.. makes us think

very strong piece! I apologize for my absence...rough time getting through the rest of doctorate. I hope to get back to writing for myself again and sharing here on fiction press. - Christine

I like the very metaphorical beginning that you've created in this, and then how it dwindles down to just a ruff voice shouting. Wonderful work; I love your thought process, it makes perfect sense, and I completely agree. Keep up the good work.

Juliet.

Lovely imagery in the first verse. I don't know if you intended it, but you talk about politicians in the first verse and then the speaker ironically takes up a really patronising tone by the end. Interesting.

Yeah, thatw as good, fantastic imagery with a real message. I liked the politicians line, because in a way, they do that. One criticism is that I think your lines are too short. Sometimes it works but in this case the poem is so good anyway it doesn't need it.