People always TRY to write poems that will affect its readers, yet no one will ever come out and say that that's what they're trying to do. Good on you.

simplistic and gorgeous. i would copy and paste what i like... but it would be the entire poem. however, i'm especially fond of "and shake out mean words that rattle your chest."

-aly

oh. wow. this is so beautiful. so simply put, but powerful images and choice of words. "and shake out mean words that rattle your chest." beautiful.

So do I.

And trust me, you do.

A baby Chandra creation - I like it, I feel the same way. I think poetry is very fast, unlike novels the whole plot and meaning is jam-packed into a smaller scope and it should envelope the reader - make them see, make them understand, put them in that position, make them swell and dream with you. Keep up the good work, and for goodness sake don't go so long between updates my'dear.

Much love,Juliet.

Cool, simple and honest.

My mouth is waning, my chest is shaking, and I'm full. This is absolutely wonderful.

marie