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| dollface and her cancer 2006-09-14 ch 1,  | abusethe slide and slip of it is like manuevering said dance floor in five inch spike heels. reading this poem is so very precarious, and that makes it delicious. the drop off ending is divine. (miss you, stranger.) |
| diffident 2006-08-13 ch 1, | abuseWell articulated, and very good flow. The ending was interesting, just a little bit offputting to the rhythm but it makes sense as to why you did it and once you take the message in mind, it's perfectly fine. marie |
| helle xandria encaitarince 2006-08-13 ch 1, | abusebeautifully dreamlike |
| Chandra-Moon 2006-08-13 ch 1, | abuseThis was eloquently written. You know how to write, you know how to talk, this poem is very lovely. It was a bit hard to get through...too much wordiness, though not in an awkward way, in a "why is this taking so long" way. This was very nice. Good job, keep writing. |