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| Marajohuiki 2006-10-17 ch 1,  | abuseI like this poem a lot. It's full of excellent imagery. I can imagine the room spinning around me and fear mingled with confusion. Wonderful job. The only thing I think I'd change is to put everything into lowercase letters, including the word 'I'. You have a total lack of capitals throughout the piece, aside from the first letter of the first word (which should probably be lowercase as well). It contributes to the mood, I think. |