Very cute. But sad, too. I feel sorry for the girl's best friend-being always there for her and having her love someone else. Emotions are good.

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I really liked this, too, because you are a flawless speller/grammatician. (Funny word!) It's so amazing to be able to read something and not have to translate parts into good, readable English.

Anyway, just one more comment-I don't know if the last paragraph really 'fits' with the rest of your story. Your story is not lighthearted, per se, but there is a kind of lightness to it, and the last paragraph almost seems to drag it down a little. If that makes any sense ...

Other than that, this was one of the best one-shots I've read on fp! Keep up the *amazing* work!

(And sorry about this uberlong review!)

emma

You're definitely one of the better author's on fictionpress. Thank you for not making me stumble over spelling errors and other mechanical catastrophes!

This story in itself is short and sweet - what I particularly liked was that you focused much more on emotions than the story. A character's feelings (especially in romance) are the building blocks of a composition. Without them, you have a list of actions on a page, and no one develops any attachment. So nice work!