This is wonderful so far. I am going to keep reading this. I like how clear of a picture you where able to create of the fight seen and each of the caricatures. How you where able to describe the caricatures personalities I think was grate, but I think it would be better if you did more descriptions of the locations too.

I really hope you will start writing more of this. Keep up the good work!

Just begun reading, but quite engrossing. Character description is detailed and gives a good picture. However the american slang does not quite go with the background and characters. Chastity seems a bit of an airhead but I have been promised that her character is yet to be fully revealed. Story is good on the whole, waiting to finish reading.

Narrative is good as are the descriptions. But perhaps language could be kept uniform uniform. Like in some places perfect English is used others modern American dialect is used. Also chastity instead of being chaste is a complete airhead.The characters of the sins are done very well. But so far the plot, though very engrossing, is a little stereotyped.But overall the story,s nice. Waiting for more.

Great story. Can't wait for more!

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