 With Rhyme and Reason 2006-08-18 . chapter 1I really like this. Very lively and jumpy. I also think the one-word-lines are a good idea. They suggest a pause-a stop-in the poem, where the reader can catch his/her breath.
Hmm... stuff to criticize. Well, to be honest with you I just woke up. I'll perhaps come back to this later.
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