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Elizabeth Bilberry 2006-08-19 . chapter 1
M, guess what I have a craving for now? I think you described the taste and feels of coffee perfectly.

EB
Rebeccas Aura 2006-08-15 . chapter 1
Ah...bless coffee! Fun little piece you have here, and so very deliciously accurate. Just a note, though: You may wish to consider adding more punctuation to the piece, especially at the end of appropriate lines. It will help with the flow and separate your train of thoughts into boxcars of individual thoughts, all of which belong to the same original train. Good job again!
eighteen hundred 2006-08-15 . chapter 1
Nice. I think this is a pretty good piece. Very simple. The "can you feel that," "can you taste that" lines worked pretty well in keeping the piece together. Good stuff.
Frore 2006-08-15 . chapter 1
Haha. Well, that was an interesting read!
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