 Rebeccas Aura 2006-08-15 . chapter 1Ah...bless coffee! Fun little piece you have here, and so very deliciously accurate. Just a note, though: You may wish to consider adding more punctuation to the piece, especially at the end of appropriate lines. It will help with the flow and separate your train of thoughts into boxcars of individual thoughts, all of which belong to the same original train. Good job again! |