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| rotten apples need love too 2007-01-14 ch 1,  | abusei love your choices of words. they make you sound unlike anyone else i have ever heard. |
| proteen 2006-10-09 ch 1, | abuseSo, this is kind of the most beautiful thing I've encountered it quite a while. |
| Xerophyte 2006-09-09 ch 1, | abuseyay! This is nice. I love the first two lines so much. The yellow thing you said in the summary is confusing...I dunno. Yellow can be sort of melancholy, but maybe that's my weird thinking... I'm in guard too! I played piano for four years, but quit to join band, and now I'm in guard because they won't let me march oboe. -Xero |
| lackluster 2006-08-30 ch 1, | abusei absolutely love your word play, particularly the first line. lovely. |
| Aquafied 2006-08-21 ch 1, | abuseyou know, only depressed people paint their walls yellow(hah) anyhow, did you mean thyme, the spice? maybe not. who smells of rosemary.. |
| The Melissa Occult 2006-08-16 ch 1, | abuseI'm tired from life... bleh... nothing to do except work. I liked it, especially the part about jupiter breezes... I want to feel them... Some people talked about references to shakespeare and garfunkle (gotta love the name...) I didn't really think of either... but maybe I did have a line of parsley, sage, rosemary, and thyme... going through my head... (Remember me to one who lives there, she once was a true friend of mine...) good things, TMO |
| Nobody-n-Particular 2006-08-16 ch 1, anon. | abuseOh! Well I certainly thought it was a reference... :) In the first line with the "rosemary and time" - similar to the song with "Parsley, sage, rosemary, and thyme". Just thought you were refering to that. It does certainly give your poem a certain "flair" as a reference. ;) |
| Nobody-n-Particular 2006-08-16 ch 1, | abuseI like the Simon & Garfunkel reference - lovely description. |
| poetic abortion 2006-08-15 ch 1, | abuseAmazing. Really. I missed you. *coos* You used rosemary, so of course you get my utter and complete love because, you know, the Shakespeare ** I am. Love this poem; love you for posting; and get some rest so you can write more gorgeous poetry! Love it. Love it. Love it. God,youamazemetonoend. ~* Noelle |
| helle xandria encaitarince 2006-08-15 ch 1, | abuseon the contrary, i believe that this is positively gorgeous. beautiful imagry. good luck at band camp! -xan |
| eighteen hundred 2006-08-15 ch 1, | abuseI liked the first line, time instead of thyme. Good stuff. |
| diffident 2006-08-15 ch 1, | abuseYou know what? **. It's about time. Finally, some happy poetry from you! The abstract descriptions are so beautiful, and I can't help who or what collective people you're writing about. "She's getting ready for the fall / and the storm to wash it all away." You're getting ready for the school year to wash away the happy you've built up over summer? Boo at that. Love this. |