Oh, wow, I don't remember reading this one before, but I truly enjoyed it. However, maybe this is just the first time I've read it since you revised it.

I love how this poem is titled "Breathe," because it simply stopped my breath. After I finished reading it, I realized I had been holding my breath the whole way through. Also, as I reread it, I saw how it can also be that the whole scene is taking place in the space of a breath.

I know I say this for just about every poem you write, but it's absolutely beautiful. My english teacher was recently talking about how when one writes a poem, the poet can use any type of word, as long as it is the perfect word for the poem. You always use the perfect words; the ones that fit the poem exactly, and just transport me into the scene you write.

Much love...TinuvielDork

Yeah your right it is very personal to yourself. Though might not remember me, but I am back, have two essays out, but they pertain to me and all, nothing boring trust me. Should have some poetry out soon. Just need to type it all.

Hm.. that was very interesting. :-O I read your author's page: English is not your first langauge?!? You could have fooled me- you're amazing!

Very beautifully written. I can relate to this poem. Definately keep writing.

Perhaps I do not understand it in the way you do, but I find this deeply connected to me in a other ways. Beautiful work. Keep writing, s.