This is absolutely gorgeous writing. You have metaphors in here that I would never be able to create. "violent hurricanes in her heart", ugh, I love it.

Keep on writing.

- A.

It's exquisite, maybellie! I love it to pieces.

You'd better submit it...or else. (haha, I sound so threatening.) Well, if you don't submit it, I just might be temped to print it right off this page and submit it for you.

Cheerio - Swirley

Wow. I actually had tears in my eyes after reading this one. A most wonderful read.

SF

Excellent story! The imagery was very nice, and you portrayed the interwoven emotions very well. Favorited.

Magical.

I loved it to death, read it twice.

If I had to find something to critique, perhaps provide a clue, even a subtle one, as to why "the stars are against" them. It sort of seems more like a plot device then an actual event.

Nice! I love your description! Write some mroe!