It looks good so far. I'll keep reading.

I'm sorry that it's taken me so long to read more of Everlinde. I won't make any excuses so I'll focus on what makes this story good. I don't really have a feel for the characters yet, but I think there's something about them I can learn to like. The setting has opportunity to be great and I'm waiting to see how you use it and the characters. I still think this has a strong fantasy vibe. Things like the mushrooms are not something I've seen in awhile.

On the technical side of writing, I didn't spot any misspellings, but there were times when the dialog and description didn't wow me. Bits like the entry into the forest in CH.7 and the end of CH. 9 are nice moments in the story.I can't speculate because I haven't read the whole story, but hopefully it won't take me long to do so :).

I managed to read the next two chapters. I have to applaud you on your superb description. The official first chapter did a great job setting up a boring Saturday for Talin.I love the back and forth banter between Talin and the sages in the 2nd chapter. Io's appearance and Talin's connection with the plot will all be explained I know so I won't guess at the plot.

Honestly, great two chapters, not much action but it's coming, I know it is. I'd like to thank you for your review on my story, it's all good advice and I'll definitely follow it ;).

I like the prologue. It reads like a true fantasy narration and cleanly explains a rich history of a fantastical land. The history of Everlinde spells out like a page from a holy book or appropriately enough a colorful history book.

You write like a pro and I loved the description, I'd enjoy a few tips from you on my own story :). This is definitely one to read.

A lovely beginning to what seems to be a brilliant and engaging piece of work! It has caught my interest! I am definitely going to enjoy this!

I am posting a original piece of work on here soon! I hope you read it when I do!

Awesome! I see that you added some stuff! Taliesin, huh? Interesting. I also notice that you are using unusual words. Words such as riposte. Cool. There are a couple of grammatical errors, but hey, there isn't a story in history that doesn't. (That I know of anyway.) Unfortunatly this review must remain short and vague for I remain incredibly busy. I will talk to you later. ~Translucently Opaque