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| under the influence 2007-10-02 ch 14,  | abuseOh, I guess I can review...hehehe... I noticed a couple of spelling errors... counter and Psalm were spelt wrong... Now where's the next chappy? :) |
| Lady R 2007-08-29 ch 13, | abuseIt's heartwarming reading Jacob's reaction to Grace. It's by no means pity, but compassion. Loved it! |
| Lady R 2007-08-27 ch 12, | abuseI just love your cliffhangers--not! LOL Good chapter, can't wait for the next update! |
| UnDesiredRomance 2006-10-09 ch 48, | abuseThis is probably one of the best stories on here I have ever read. I've been writing and reading for about 4 years now, and I have never read something this good on a amature site. You should really think about publishing it. I know I'd be first in line to buy, :)! |
| Twist130 2006-10-02 ch 48, | abuse'The stars hung like diamonds...' I like that simile. :-) And, after all she'd been through, would the baby really be fine? When he's talking about Bill, and how she blamed her self, it says "No maybe." That doesn't makes sense... do you mean NOT maybe? or something else? Oh... he's becoming a cop because of her... that's original. Great chapter!! Update soon, I want to know what happens, you know, get that 'ended' feel. Once again, I reviewed as I went... |
| Wiccan Poet 2006-10-02 ch 48, | abuseYes, luvvin it, aye that jacob knows better ;) And yeh, fluff it up, its all really serious and bitter-sweet, how bout some "aw" butterfly-stomach factor ??:D Your writings fab dolly mixture, keep it up !! as always your devoted reader x |
| Jugglingbearperformer 2006-10-01 ch 48, | abuseWOW! Excellent chapter,I'm so glad the Jacob didn't decide to not stay with Grace. Please update :).lol just a little bit of info..I think you should 'fluff' up the last chapter you know? Like all of them have been about Curtis, his preist hood, other people, you should make the last chapter about just them, ya know? Well whatever you choose to do, it'll be awesome ^.^ |
| Twist130 2006-09-27 ch 47, | abuseYay! Another chapter! In the very beginning, though, it says 'of the times she'd been raped' she's only been raped once, by Mark, I thought, never from Curtis... He just came close. Right? Or do you mean not REALLY raped just... 'raped through her clothes'? And with the whole supernatural thing, are you starting a new plotline-ish thing with this? Because your story's already pretty long, and you've already started the sequel, haven't you? Or is this just some small little thing that will be done away with in a chapter? Heh, I like John's points on the vows with the non-honest heart and everything. Very logical. Haha, it was wierd, I was scanning the Romance section for a new story yesterday, and I saw Brotherly Love. I was like, hey, that seems familiar... If my review doesnt make too much sense, its probly cause i've been reviewing as I read, rather than at the end. Things distract me too much so I dont remember, so I do it like this now. :-) Update soon!! I want to finish this and start Brotherly Love... the sequel right? |
| Wiccan Poet 2006-09-27 ch 47, | abuseOne chapter to go ? Oh, juicy, luvving it ! My msn screwed up btw, thats why I never replied to those emails, but thankyou ! :) Excellent writing dolly, keep it up ;) x |
| Twist130 2006-09-25 ch 46, | abuseGood chapter! Only, in the beginning, you say 'morning & early afternoon'-- you should write out the &... Also, didn't he already break his celibacy vow? ...I mean, he already sorta ditched it, now he just needs to say it, right? Ohh... mystery! What's happening at the Carpenters? And the thing with John and Diana made me laugh... don't ask why, I don't know, either. |
| under the influence 2006-09-25 ch 46, | abusegood chapter...:) this line was a bit confusing, however: 'He supposed that would be easy, since Grace was carrying his child'...I know what you were going for, but the way you wrote it doesn't seem to fit in... |
| Twist130 2006-09-24 ch 45, | abuseYay! A chapter! This was pretty good... I liked how it was basically Grace's thoughts and feelings and reflections on what had happened, in her journal. You need to keep posting!! I really want to see how this ends! |
| Wiccan Poet 2006-09-22 ch 46, | abuseAw, your a sweetheart, you could have ignored me, lol !! Thankyou thankyou thankyou :P Take it as a compliment dolly, your story is amazing ;) Whenever you have time from beig a mum or writing fab stories, R&R mine sometime ! Always your devoted reader ;) xx |
| Wiccan Poet 2006-09-22 ch 45, | abuseI'm quite disapointed, I guess 'cos even if it IS extravagant, it still deserves an ending. I'm just the sort of person who would read a book and have to finsih it no matter what ! lol...*reluctantly shuffles over to shephards grace*...x |
| under the influence 2006-09-22 ch 45, | abuseI think you've made a good decision...not that I didn't like story, because I did...A LOT...but I know that the story will be even greater once it is complete...:) by the way, are you going to remove any of the versions? also, I'm still willing to read over your chappies before you post them--if you want another viewpoint :) |