I really like this story. I didn't think it was rushed. It's hard to write 30 words and you got the plot out on the table. I like Jessica: she isn't a Mary-Sue, and that's a good thing. It's hard to not write Mary-Sues, but you've managed to make her normal enough. I really like the characters in this as well.

Good job! I really like all your writing but this story just stood out to me.