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Reviews For: Do you love me?

scotti
2006-10-04
ch 1,
abuseThis is terribly sad and beautiful "Never to bloom; never to fade." This one line was my favorite and it broke my heart too. Nice Job! ~~Scottie
Inspired Empire
2006-09-27
ch 1,
abusei like this a lot. especially the last four lines.

-michael hoblak
Black and White Dreams
2006-08-19
ch 1,
abuseThis is so sweet and sad... Great job.

*::~Cat~::*
Viktrona
2006-08-19
ch 1,
abuseinterestingly put. Ruby
An-Author-At-Heart
2006-08-17
ch 1,
abuseI love how the poem has dialogue, it adds more reality to it, which I like. And the repetition has more rhythm and theme to it too. The emotions are simple but prominent, and easy for the reader to really grasp. The last few lines are beautiful too.
girl without wings
2006-08-17
ch 1,
abuseI like the way the dialogue bounces back and forth between the he and she. It gives the poem a playful feel, and that playful feelings is betrayed by the not-so-happy ending. The irony is bittersweet. Keep writing!
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