This is so powerful... it's like you're speaking from my own head, and I feel like I'm right there with the narrator, or esle I *am* him. Great job with this!

Oh, and the imagery is golden. Awesomely rendered.

~Cristina :)

The imagery is excellent but I'm not sure of the meaning of this story. It was more of a poetic nightmare than a story to me. I will comment that talent is very evident and keep writing.