"it's just a funeral for happier days" - such a damned perfect line.

i'm speechless. this is honestly truly moving. vivid, colourful, amazing. god... just ** brilliant.

i love the way you end this poem, it's beautiful and the image lingers.

This is amazing, the line breaks & the beautiful imagery and all of that. I love the line "there's a shadow on the wall and it's raining indoors" as well as "just a charcoal stained sunrise". You're amazing.

damnit your writing is still soso amazing. i love this. i love how your format is branching out. this is just - absolutely beautiful. i'm stunned. "there's a shadow on the wall and it's raining indoors again" coupled with the beginning makes it so much more ironic, so tired. which is good, because the line itself sounds like angst. i don't really like what comes next - it feels a little too whiny. heh. but then - you explode. & it's beautiful. "a funeral for happier days" is used perfectly ... "sunlight burning through stained glass windows" ... "music on her tongue" ... & the ending ... prettypretty. i love it.

~kait

Wow. Amazing. I love the whole thing. "there’s a shadow on the wall and it’s raining indoors again" best line, but not by much because it is all perfect. "she tastes the music on her tongue" wow. Just wow.