So many things to say! I'm just hoping that I do not forget.

First off, in the intention to be a reviewer that helps the writer improve (Because there's no limit to how many times one can improve), I'll give you some helpful advice for a problem I regularly came across.

Sentence Structure: As in, the 'flow' of your sentences. Here's an example of this problem directly from your story: spend the rest of the morning in the study, flipping through books, but the words on the page slip through my mind like air through a window screen. Sometime around one, I hear Dad's heavy footsteps pass the study. He's slept late again, and that worries me. Though he promises to quit drinking, I'm no longer naive enough to believe that his freelance writing keeps him up so late. His laptop is on the desk next to my books, and there's a layer of dust over it thick enough to trap a fly's footprints.

All of the sentences have the same rythm (sp?). Variety of sentence lengths and tones is really important to how the reader percieves the story. Just a thought to keep in mind for future reference.

Now to other things I noticed.

Does this story, by any chance, have a connection with Oscar Wilde's Dorian Gray?

Your main character's description sounds exactly like my main character, Alecia Crawford. I just thought that was cool.

Also, I love how, at the end of the chapter, you make your readers want to feel bad for Daria Vane. At first we want to hate her, but you've made that not so easy to do. Confusing the readers is one of the best author skills.

Your story happened to be in one of the same supernatural communities as mine, Enjoy the Silence I think, and the description really sucked me in. It's been three or four years since I first joined this site, three or four years since I've been as intensely interested by any story on Fictionpress. I always felt that stories about haunted houses were terribly overdone. They could never be scary, nor interesting anymore. However, this story is making me doubt that belief. I like it. There are a few typos here and there, but it's far too easy to overlook them for the marvelous plot.

In all, I will be a frequent reader. The summer time, for me, entails hours of reading and anime. I only have three more chapters to go before I complete my novel. This will be the Fictionpress story that kicks my summer off. You should get the notice soon that I've added this story to my favorites. (I'd add it to story alert, but I think you've completed it already).

P.S. And Wow! 89 reviews with 14 chapters! My story has 180 reviews with 41 chapters. I barely had more than 30 or 40 reviews when I reached my 14th chapter.

~Good Day/Adieu

Nice.
I love the bit where she buys Daria's house.
What happened to Grandma?

Wow.
So, I just finished this story. I must say this was pretty good. More than good. There was a few grammar mistakes, and I mean, in some places it could get boring, yet it pulls you in, obviously making you want to read more. In some of the wolf scenes and others it's kind of unclear, but I truly liked it in general. I enjoyed the end. It didn't totally catch me by surprise, but it was a nice ending. I would love to see a sequel, but again, it's good by it's own. Again, great story, I loved the concept.
Rachel

Okay, wow, that story was amazing! I felt like I had shivers the entire time, it just had that overall creepiness feeling to it (this is a good thing, in my opinion!). My favorite part was the chapter 13, when they were making the deal. There was just so much anticipation there, I thought it was very well-written.

As for improvement: I'm not sure. One thing maybe would be the stuff revolving around Larson. His appearance was kind of strange... like maybe there could have been more depth to that part, if it was needed at all. But I dunno... it was also fine the way it was, I think?

So, great job!

my goodness, you are imaginative. I love how the way we view daria transformed throughout the story... very interesting. she starts as a very frightening witch type, but then develops into something more motherly.

the house cleaning and selling parts reminded me a bit of howl's moving castle somehow... they had a sense of levity somehow, when paired with the dark motifs of spiders and blood, which was actually quite cool.

your style is very mature, which made your typos more noticeable, to be honest. there were quite a few, but I am not a grammar nazi, so it didn't bother me. however, it would be something to fix if you do edit this piece.

haunting story with clever allusions strewn about. well done! you should be proud of this piece. well deserved nomination at the TiRO awards (and SKoW, for that matter).

hi! this story looks pretty interesting so far. I've heard the name before, as it was suggested to me, but forgot about it for quite a while. I ran across it today one someones favorites list and remembered the rec, and here I am :)

has definite promise. I'll be back to read/review tomorrow morning, after classes and such. gnight!

Reproba Spero -False I hope- Clever. If only your characters were forced to take Latin like me.

Anyways, thanks for an interesting chapter. I'll definately keep reading.

This is a great story. It has an interesting, unique plot and is amazingly well written; all traits that are rare in today's literature. I'm really glad that it was nominated for the SKOWs, because I never would have come across it otherwise. So keep up the good work and and I promise to vote for you!

wow Im so pleased with how this story turned out! Very interesting and the characters are engaging.

Intriguing! Love how there's so many questions you haven't answered, it's a nice way to end the story, and well I'm stumped.. :) Whilst I love how it ended, I would have liked to know more about the mystery villain, and maybe a bit more about Daria and Clara.
You have some great description and imagery in this story, and to be honest, a pleasure to read :D

This is truly a amazing story. You have much talent and I urge you to write more. I'm sure, if you ever wanted a career as an author, you would definitely succeed. Once again, this is a fabulous story.

This is an amazing story! I love it. I'm glad I read it.

That's a lot of spiders. Kind of creepy in a way.

This chapter was surprising.

Nice job.